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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Operative Ghost on February 07, 2011, 10:57:05 am »
Same, I love it.  I like how the songs are included as well.

Lol... every time I see Poppy, I have to do a double take to make sure I am not reading Pappy :p
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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Onyxs on February 06, 2011, 10:15:54 pm »
Really loving how this one is unfolding.

There's been some really great characters introduced--I can't wait to see how some of these side-plots end up. The development of the players is happening at a really good pace. You learn just enough at each read that the familiarity builds up. Then, something else happens and you gain another batch of insight into one or more.

Integrating the songs with the chapters is a huge success. It gives each one a theme, and even if the reader isn't familiar with the song, they can still follow what's happening. If you listen to the song, it then just adds that much more.

The glimpses into aspects of military life in the field is a bit eye-opening, at least for me. Things I'd never have thought of happen and I smack my forehead with "Oh, of course that would happen".

The bridges and transitional paragraphs work really well, helping to adjust the pace and focus when needed. I can't even say what my favorite parts are--it varies lol.

Anyway, am sitting on the edge of my seat waiting impatiently for the next installment:)

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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Onyxs on February 06, 2011, 05:50:16 pm »
So far he has been making it look like he is a regular cargo ship captain and waiting for someone to take the hook and try to take advantage of him being on the right side of the law.  Maybe try to employ him to smuggle something that would tend to be illegal in the eyes of a Imperial.  Maybe move troops (as his ship is large enough) or vehicles and weapons.

Hmm, that could be kind of interesting. Cabod's leave of absence was somewhat along the same line--and netted him some good contacts in the process :)
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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Operative Ghost on February 06, 2011, 06:50:27 am »
I have Ghost listed as "On Assigment" and not attached formally to any squad. My motivation was that I was kind of hoping you come back with a story of what you were doing, sort of running concurrently with Restless :)

Ahh, ok.  And wow, that's alot of people listed, even though most don't RP :p.  From what I have been doing with Ghost was having him as a sleeper agent to slowly infiltrate the spacer community.  To slowly form connections with possible rebel cells, pirates and the like.  As a sleeper though, he has no connection with 220 so he won't ever be linked with the Empire.  So on the 220 side of things, they won't really be getting much actual reports unless he successfully achieves in making a genuine connection. 

So far he has been making it look like he is a regular cargo ship captain and waiting for someone to take the hook and try to take advantage of him being on the right side of the law.  Maybe try to employ him to smuggle something that would tend to be illegal in the eyes of a Imperial.  Maybe move troops (as his ship is large enough) or vehicles and weapons.
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Stories / Re: Restless Hearts
« Last post by Theodorik on February 05, 2011, 03:50:53 pm »
Command & Control Center

Field Base Baz Nitch, Naboo


0930 Hrs, Monday
 
Yesterday was a difficult day for Outlaw, both physically and emotionally.  The patrol turning sour on them was not completely unexpected, but the scale of the firefight was surprising.  Major Jezebel had a person on the ground in the city, and the report was 14 civilians injured, 3 dead, and 1 missing.  Amongst the dead was Rebar Merkrit, son of the local warlord.  To the troopers’ credit, none of their actions resulted in any civilian injuries other than the trio at the house.  They had even managed to rescue three locals, one of which was attached to Melky Berran most of the previous night.
 
The aftermath of the patrol was what was weighing on Outlaw’s mind, however.  Kammi stayed to share a meal, and the two sat in uncomfortable silence as they ate.  She left a short time after, with barely any words exchanged by the couple. Outlaw now had two women to think about.  He loved Kamiko, but their relationship was impossible to work out.   Then there was the little twi’lek girl who he really liked, who was here on Naboo, right now, and might just go anywhere he went if he asked her.  But, she was all of 18 years old and very accustomed to her comfortable living style.
 
 “Lieutenant Outlaw, you have anything to add?” asked Major Jezebel.
 
“No ma’am, you’ve covered everything,” he replied.
 
“I will be in a holo- meeting with Major “Ice Man” Sturmwolke from 220th Recon in one hour, discussing our next course of action.  Dismissed.”
 
Outlaw and the three other troopers all rose from their seats and made their way out of the shelter.  Major Kassel had noticed he was distracted, but it wasn’t worth dressing the soldier down in front of the other team Sergeants.  The important details he knew, most he had provided for the briefing actually.  Hammer was only temporarily blinded, but was off of combat duty until Doctor Elber gave him clearance.  Staff Sergeant “Krayt” A’Sardu was going to fill the spot on Outlaw’s team, which was a worthy replacement for the Hammer.
 
The thug the teams had captured was stabilized and resting in the medical center, under heavy guard.  He was having surgery this evening to repair his ruptured eardrum, not a complicated procedure for the staff, even considering their crude environment.  An agent was coming from Imperial Intelligence to have a crack at him the day after tomorrow.  There were a few dots that needed connecting in that village.

The Lieutenant didn’t need to speak to his brother to know what he would suggest next, bring in Poppy.  Outlaw was playing some possible scenarios in his head.  The most appealing to most of the men would be fast roping in from air speeders and then snatching their target from wherever he was. Then light to medium armored vehicles would swoop in and they would race out of the city.  That was an operation that Outlaw could guarantee would work.
 
The backlash for a daylight raid could be massive, however.  There was another possibility forming in Outlaw’s mind, something a little more delicate politically.  He would wait until the word came from Major Kassel on their next course of action before he explained his idea.  The best thing for him to do right now was sleep, between his sore back and his clouded mind, he had gotten very little.
 
 
Several Hours Later
 
“Wait a minute, Lolana, your father is who?” Milky asked the young woman.
 
“My father, Ferran Ryltans, is the deposed mayor of Lianorm.  Poppy and his thugs took over a month ago, and since we didn’t really have much in the way of a sheriff, there wasn’t anything we could do.”
 
“So how did you end up working for him?” the corporal asked skeptically.
 
“I used to work at the restaurant in the center of town.  But Poppy had it closed down because we were putting his place across the street out of business. So, work for Poppy, or don’t work.”
 
“That’s ridiculous, we have to go and arrest that bastard.”
 
“The people are so jaded right now, Poppy is only the last in a long line of local war lords.  When the RSF finally intervened and cleaned up the place, an election was held and my father won. But everyone predicted it wouldn't last.”
 
“So where is the RSF now?” asked the mountain man.
 
“They don’t get in the Empire’s way, especially Stormtroopers.  That attack in the jungle, had nothing to do with us.  But once the stormies took over in this area, they stopped coming around to make sure things were running smoothly.”
 
Melky could only shake his head.
 
“That makes no sense, the RSF is afraid of us?”
 
“On some level, yes, but the real problem is political.  They have been browbeaten enough times for getting in the way, so they chose the path of least resistance here.  Let the Empire deal with the consequences.”
 
The pathfinder had spent all day with the young woman; she was very intelligent, and easy to be around.  Her siblings were getting the royal treatment from the troopers at the camp, freshly prepared food, games, a tour of the gunships, to name a few things.  They were now tucked into beds at another Imperial pre-fabbed shelter nearby.  The soldiers enjoyed having young people around, as most of them were family men.  Melky and Theo were the only two men from Team Vampire who didn’t have children and a family at home. 
 
“I’m sorry it came to this, Lolana.  You don’t think arresting Merkrit and his son will help?”
 
“We can win the war, but the Empire is always good at losing the peace.”
 
Those words didn’t set well with Melky, who was really beginning to like Lolana.  She had wild dark brown hair and big brooding sultry dark brown eyes.  Her complexion was also dark, like much of the local humans.  Her full lips and bright smile brought a happy grin to Melky’s own face; she even had a pair of cute little dimples on her cheeks.  He wasn’t sure of the implications of such, but Melky was really attracted to this girl.
 
“We have to tell ‘Law about this,” he concluded, pressing some buttons on his data device.
 
Outlaw, got some news.
 
An immediate and automated reply popped onto his screen.
 
Long night … sleeping … if it’s important, come and get me, if not, don’t even think about it.
 
“Crap,” Melky muttered, "I'll have to tell him in the morning."
 
“Melky, you have a wife or a girlfriend back home?” Lolana asked, seemingly out of nowhere.
 
“Uh … no … I’m single …” the young man stammered.
 
“Would it be a bad thing if I asked you to come over here and kiss me?”
 
“No … I mean … if you want me to …” Melky continued to struggle with his words; still he crossed the room to sit next to her on his bed.
 
“My love, don’t be nervous, I owe you a great debt,” she whispered.
 
“You are my knight in shining armor, and now you’ve whisked me away to your castle,” she continued breathily, “there is only one thing left for us to do.”
 
The trooper shivered at the last part of her sentence, bringing his eyes to look into hers.  Lolana brought her hand up to tenderly touch his face.  Melky responded by placing his hand on her upper thigh.  He wasn’t terribly experienced in this field, having been a scout trooper deployed to various high risk assignments over the past three years.  The sultry young brunette had many lovers during her time as a waitress and bartender in Lianorm.  It was apparent to the Corellian that she knew what she wanted, and he would happily, albeit nervously, oblige.
 
Lolana pressed her lips gently to his, caressing his face as she did so.  He took her lead, returning the kiss, opening his mouth to allow his tongue to explore hers.  In a matter of moments, they were lying on the bed, passionately meeting lips, hands beginning to roam under each other’s clothes. The couple was amazingly comfortable together, every move by one complimented by the other.  Their movements were in sync, like long time partners engaged in a familiar dance.  The two shared one another that night, physically and emotionally, and woke up snuggling together the following morning.
 
“I hope that this wasn’t a onetime thing,” he asked her, trailing his fingers along her arm.
 
“It was supposed to be, but now …” her voice trailed off.
 
“But now?” he echoed.
 
“You’re my knight in shining armor, this could be our happy ending,” she smiled, rolling onto her back to meet his eyes.
 
“Seems to me that it’s more like a happy beginning,” he said with a wide smile.
 
 
Just like a knight in shining armor, from a long time ago.
Just in time I will save the day, take you to my castle far away.
I am a man who will fight for your honor; I'll be the hero you're dreaming of.
We're gonna live forever, knowing together that we did it all for the glory of love.
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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Theodorik on February 05, 2011, 03:46:56 pm »
The current CCXX RP timeline has us with 10 squads of 5 plus a command element of 5.  I have to update that information, I just haven't figured out where.  ICly, we have 55 warm bodies assigned to the 220th Stormtrooper Reconnaissance Platoon (Long Range).  Some Operatives are in varying degrees of readiness, or assigned out (on loan) to other units, a practice often seen in real world special forces.  For those purposes, I have Ghost listed as "On Assigment" and not attached formally to any squad. My motivation was that I was kind of hoping you come back with a story of what you were doing, sort of running concurrently with Restless :)
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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Operative Ghost on February 05, 2011, 11:11:47 am »
Lol, yea I just noticed I was the only one who answered that post back there. 
You could have used Ghost in your story, though back then I was not sure if the story was in the past or present. 

Lets see, if you wanted this to be a current operation, you can use Ghost how he is now.  He is working undercover as a mute Y8 cargo captain called Nek Petsamet with Geezer as his copilot.  Gah, you would have loved to see his cover IG.  Basically, I turned him into a long haired ginger with Pappeto's help of HGS makeup.

Though anyways, as it is in the present, you could always have a random run in with Ghost.  It could either be a random encounter where you call for a nondescript transport for part of the mission, and Ghost (as Nek) would be there, maybe in the middle of a job where he just played nice and picked you up.  As for Pappy... he could have been in another past of the ship during the trip, been wearing a helmet, or had been flying his X-wing and being the Y8's escort (which is usually done sometimes).  The funny thing would be you would have never known it to be Ghost and Geezer lol. 

It can be one of those few moments, like you randomly bumping into someone in the bar and not knowing who they were... even though they know you very well hahaha.

It's disappointing that we have gone even more quiet on RP.  RID is like that as well, so they have taken to making a more smaller group.  Maybe we may end up making ours just one squad withing 220.  I know our RP rooster is outdated as it still has like the 4-5 squads.
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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Theodorik on February 03, 2011, 01:23:54 pm »
Now that I can post here from the boat, I can say I do.  I like the progress of the storyline alot.  Though, just one question but are some of the guys in The0's team in the guild or RL?  Such as the guy called Milky?  :)

When I began the story, I didn't get any feedback from anyone about lending me their character to be in the story.  To be honest, its been like novacaine free dentistry getting anyone to use the forums to begin with.  Also, it looks like we are having a departure from RP, so I just made up a team. 
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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Operative Ghost on February 03, 2011, 12:53:58 pm »
Now that I can post here from the boat, I can say I do.  I like the progress of the storyline alot.  Though, just one question but are some of the guys in The0's team in the guild or RL?  Such as the guy called Milky?  :)
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General Discussion / Re: Comments on "Restless Hearts"
« Last post by Theodorik on January 31, 2011, 09:04:17 pm »
No one likes the story? /pout
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